BE CAREFUL WHAT YOU WISH FOR! I LEARNED THIS THE HARD WAY Topic: A genie has offered to grant your main character one wish. Unexpectedly, the wish has some negative consequences for the main character and/or other characters. Mauri Fava 2013 Audience 2
Elementary through middle school Keep language and theme appropriate for this audience. While there can be action, violence cannot be graphic. Purpose 3
Your story should entertain but also deliver an important message. There is a lesson to be learned from this story. Task: Write a ten-paragraph short story and be sure to include: 4 Dynamic Character: main character who makes the wish and changes from the experience.
2.Static Character: genie who offers the wish. 3.Clear and consistent point of view: first or third person is acceptable. 4.Conflict: what are the negative effects of the wish? 5.Resolution: how is the conflict resolved? It doesnt have to be a happy ending! 6.Dialogue: this should provide information about characters and events 7.Imagery that appeals to the senses: simile, metaphor, hyperbole, personification, alliteration, onomatopoeia 1. BRAINSTORM What are the features of a good
short story? 6 Character: develop a character who the reader can identify with and be interested in. Setting: Use imagery to create a strong sense of place and atmosphere. Plot: Construct a series of events that include a strong conflict, a suspenseful rising action, an exciting climax, and a thoughtful resolution. Theme: Give the story a sense of purpose and meaning. Dialogue: Use dialogue to convey information about the characters and to forward the plot Point of View: Select the appropriate point of view for your tale. First person is more intimate but third person is
more objective. What genre will you select for your story? 7 Science Fiction Fantasy Horror Mystery Realistic Fiction Historical
Fiction Romance Humor What conflict will you create? Think Pair Share: What can go wrong? 8 A lonely young girl wishes to be wanted.
An overweight girl who is bullied wishes to be thin. A boy whose dog has died wishes to have the pet back. An unemployed man about to lose his house wishes for a million bucks.
A young teenage boy wishes he could have all the chicks. A singer wishes to become famous. A child who is fascinated with dinosaurs wished they still roamed the earth.
A teen girl wishes her parents would leave her alone. A clumsy teen wishes to become varsity quarterback. A video addict wishes to become part of his game.
A young boy with a scientific mind wishes to visit the future. A teenage girl wishes she didnt have an annoying little brother. Character+Wish+Consequence Brainstorm and Share 9
Create a one sentence story premise that includes a wish and what goes wrong. Main Character 10
Who makes the wish? What does he or she learn from the conflict? Create a focused character description that includes only details relevant to the story. Guess the wish: 11 Age: 16 Gender: male Personality trait: insecure Physical features: short and underweight Relevant hobbies/interests: basketball
Place in the world: no one respects him Wish: To be tall enough to play varsity basketball! Guess the wish: 12 Age: 75 Gender: female Personality trait: lonely Physical features: gray hair, walks with a cane Relevant hobbies/interests: reading romances Place in the world: depressed and alone after husband died and longing for the energy, beauty, and attention of her youth
Wish: To be young again! Who makes this wish? Who is your main character? 13 Age: Gender: Personality: Physical features: Relevant hobbies/interests: Place in the world: Which point of view will you select for
your story? 14 First person (the I voice): Third person (the he/she/it voice):
Narrator is one of the characters in the story. We only learn this narrators thoughts and feelings about events. The narration is not objective and or always reliable, but readers tend to identify more with this character. Omniscient: mystery narrator knows everything and can offer insight into the thoughts and feelings of all characters. Limited: narrator knows everything about one character. Objective (the he/she/it voice): Narration is limited to describing events and provides no
insight into the thoughts and feelings of characters. First Person 15 I was so angry at Mom that day. It wasnt the first time that I had to sit at home, watching some lame T.V. show with my little brother, while all of my friends went to a party. I felt like Mom was never going to let me grow up. I was desperate for just a little freedom. Well, I got a lot more than I bargained for. Third Person
16 Charlie Robbins loved his video games. He played every day after school. On the weekends, he played as much as his mom would allow. Mario Super Smash Brothers was his favorite. He loved Mario and sometimes wondered what it would be like to hang out with him. So imagine Charlies surprise when one day Mario popped out of the television screen and said, Whats up, Dude? PLOT ELEMENTS
Mini-lesson Plot 18 Climax Rising Action Resolution Exposition Falling Action Exposition 19
The beginning of the narrative which introduces characters, setting, and conflict. These quotes are taken from famous expositions. Can you identify them? A long time ago in a galaxy far, far away Faster than a speeding bullet! More powerful than a locomotive. Able to leap tall buildings at a single bound! Look! Up in the sky! It's a bird! It's a
plane! It's Rising Action 20 The conflict is revealed and developed. The rising action in Little Red Riding Hood includes: 1. Girl meets wolf 2. Wolf eats Grandmother 3. Wolf disguises himself as Grandmother 4. Red visits Grandmother (who is now really the wolf) 5. Red questions Grandmother who now appears oddly different
What is the rising action of Cinderella? Climax 21 The moment of great suspense or the turning point. EXAMPLE: In the movie, Jaws, Chief Brody blows up the shark! What is the climax of your favorite movie? Falling Action 22
The series of events which take place after the climax and lead to the conclusion. The suspense begins to lessen. Example: In the climax of the novel and movie, Hunger Games, Katniss and Peeta are announced as survivors of the game. During the falling action, the two are collected by a hovercraft from the arena and hospitalized for their countless wounds. After several days of recovering, the pair are interviewed, and sent on the Victory Tour to visit all the districts. Resolution 23 The part of the plot where the conflict
is over and the loose ends are all tied up. Example: In The Three Little Pigs, the wolf is killed and the pigs live happily ever after. If you could rewrite a resolution, which book or film would you choose and how would you end it? Suggested Plot Chart EXPOSITION: INTRODUCE CHARACTERS, SETTING, AND CONFLICTLICT Paragraph 1: introduce main character and setting. Paragraph 2: describe main character and
give background info that relates to wish. RISING ACTION: THE CONFLICT IS DEVELOPED Paragraph 3: catalyst event before the wish (it should motivate character to make the wish). Paragraph 4: genie is encountered and wish is made. Paragraph 5: life may appear better at first after the wish. 24 Paragraph 6: trouble sets in. Paragraph 7: the conflict escalates.
CLIMAX: THE HIGHEST POINT OF TENSION Paragraph 8: what is the worst that can happen? FALLING ACTION: WHAT HAPPENS AFTER THE CLIMAX? Paragraph 9: what happens after the climax? RESOLUTION: HOW DOES THE STORY END? Paragraph 10: what is the final outcome? How has the main character been impacted by events? Completed Plot Chart
EXPOSITION: INTRODUCE CHARACTERS, SETTING, AND CONFLICTLICT Paragraph 1: introduce main character and setting. Happened last year, wanted some attention, stranger gave it, its a nightmare. Paragraph 2: describe main character and give background info that relates to wish. Seventh grader, dull looks and personality, needs attention. RISING ACTION: THE CONFLICT IS DEVELOPED Paragraph 3: catalyst event before the wish (it should motivate character to make the wish). Jamie is eating alone in cafeteria when play auditions are announced.
Paragraph 4: genie is encountered and wish is made New student appears and offers wish. Paragraph 5: life may appear better at first after the wish. Everyone notices Jamie. 25 Paragraph 6: trouble sets in. Jamie sees wanted posters after school. Paragraph 7: the conflict escalates. Television news bulletins feature Jamie. CLIMAX: THE HIGHEST POINT OF TENSION Paragraph 8: what is the worst that can happen? FBI agents burst into Jamies home and arrest her.
FALLING ACTION: WHAT HAPPENS AFTER THE CLIMAX? Paragraph 9: what happens after the climax? Jamie goes to a juvenile detention center and awaits a trial. RESOLUTION: HOW DOES THE STORY END? Paragraph 10: what is the final outcome? How has the main character been impacted by events? Jamie wishes she could go back to being the girl who was unnoticed. She realizes that girl was fine and just needed to take some chances. THE HOOK
Mini-lesson How can you hook the reader? 27 Meaningful statement Question or series of
questions Working backwards Flashback Cliffhanger Dialogue Meaningful Statement 28 Be careful what you wish for; you just might get it. I learned this the hard way four years ago when a stranger came into my life and offered to make my dreams come true. I was at a really low point in my life, so how
could I say no? I thought that being the most popular kid in middle school would be like living a dream. Well, its a nightmare! And Im still living it. Questions 29 If someone offered you a million dollars, what would you do? Would you take it? Well, thats exactly what got me into this situation. My dad lost his job and I was tired of living on macaroni and cheese. So when the genie asked me to make my wish, of course I asked for cash. The
problem was how I asked. A million bucks can be taken in two ways. And this genie had a sick sense of humor. Working Backwards 30 Im sitting in my dark cell, listening to the screams around me from other cells. I can feel a draft although I have no window, and I can smell the toilet that is two feet from my bed. I have five years to go in here. How did I get here? All I can say is: be careful what you wish for.
Flashback 31 A spotlight shone on Dorothy and Buster as they headed to the dance floor, newly crowned, prom queen and king. Everyone applauded as the happy pair twirled around the floor. Dorothy could still feel dizzy remembering that moment. The only other time she had felt such joy was on her wedding day. Sixty years later, Buster had passed and Dorothy was all alone. And the graceful beauty of her youth was just a distant memory. Sometimes, Dorothy wished she could just fling herself back into better years.
Cliffhanger 32 Sarahs little brother was so annoying. He always spied on her and her friends. At dinner, he whined when he didnt like the food and sometimes threw tantrums in restaurants. It was so embarrassing! Sometimes Sarah wished she didnt have this annoying little brother. Sometimes she wished he would just disappear Dialogue
33 Im sorry, son, but we did everything we could. I gripped my moms hand tighter as I heard these words. I couldnt accept it. I couldnt believe that everything had been done. I held it together just long enough to get to the car where I broke down and cried like a baby. I was still bawling in my bedroom that night when the genie appeared. METAPHOR Mini-lesson
Play with Metaphor 35 Avoid worn out comparisons: Cliche: It was raining cats and dogs. Fresh: The rain came down in long knitting needles. 36 Create unusual comparisons The sun
= piece of fruit or body part Your enemys heart = a landscape Dress A face = a sound = household appliance or machine Examples 37 The sun glared at me, a critical eye following me down the street, making me want to hold my head down to avoid the scrutiny. His heart was a lifeless desert after the loss of his wife, a barren
hopeless place. Sarahs gaudy prom dress shouted across the room at me, its brash colors screaming all at once for my attention. I stare at my girlfriends face, trying to figure her out, but she is a wall clock that is too far away to read. DLO: Describe your character using a metaphor and try to avoid worn out comparisons. Post it! ORGANIZATION Mini-lesson Organization 39
Details should be ordered logically and transitions must be present. Questions to ask yourself: Are my details in logical order? Are my verb tenses consistent? Did I use transitions? 40 Verb Tense: Keep it consistent! The nurse gave us a room. I had to lie on the bed in the room to rest my ankle. My mom and I watched TV for three hours. Then the doctor
comes in and tells us I sprained my ankle. He puts a pad under running water and squeezes it out. The nurse gave us a room. I had to lie on the bed in the room to rest my ankle. My mom and I watched TV for three hours. Then the doctor came in and told us I sprained my ankle. He put a pad under running water and squeezed it out. Identify the transitions 41 At the stadium, I always have a good time. After I take my seat, I listen to the crowd and enjoy the familiar smells of hot dogs and
popcorn. As the players take to the field, I stand and cheer. When the game begins, I take out my binoculars because I dont want to miss a thing. By the fifth inning, I am starving and go grab a hot dog from a vendor. At the bottom of the ninth, I have usually lost my voice from all of the cheering I do. When the game is over, I feel sad even when the home team wins because I dont want a good day to end. At home, all I can think about is when I can go to the next game. 42 Organize: Tense and transitions
At the stadium, I always have a good time. After I take my seat, I listen to the crowd and enjoy the familiar smells of hot dogs and popcorn. As the players take to the field, I stand and cheer. When the game begins, I take out my binoculars because I dont want to miss a thing. By the fifth inning, I am starving and go grab a hot dog from a vendor. At the bottom of the ninth, I have usually lost my voice from all of the cheering I do. When the game is over, I feel sad even when the home team wins because I dont want a good day to end. At home, all I can think about is when I can go to the next game. DIALOGUE Mini-lesson
Dialogue 44 Direct Quotes: Use quotation marks when you are repeating exactly what was said: Please turn in your short stories by Friday, Mrs. Jones said. Indirect Quotes: Dont use quotation marks if you are just talking about what someone said. Sarah said that she would be here by noon. He wondered whether Mr. Roberts would say yes.
Direct Quotes 45 1.The comma or punctuation mark always goes WITHIN the quotes, never outside. "You need to study more," my teacher said. Why cant you come tonight? he asked. 2. The dialogue tag, when following a quote, should begin in lower case. "Is the test on Monday?" he asked. I dont want to go to the dentist! she cried. Direct Quotes continued 46
3. If the information following the quote is not a dialogue tag, the dialogue should end with a period, and the information following should be punctuated as a complete sentence. "I have something to tell you." Sally pulled her friend away from the lunch table. Your dog ate your homework? Mr. Smith studied me with suspicion. 4. If a dialogue tag interrupts a sentence of dialogue, the second portion of the dialogue should be in lower case. "I dont care, Jessie lied, if I fail the test. Sally, he said, the movie starts at eight. Direct Quotes Continued 47
5. If you want to insert a dialogue tag between two sentences, you would write: I dont want meatloaf for dinner again, he complained. I want pizza. I cant go to the game on Saturday, Josh revealed. Im grounded this weekend. 6. When writing dialogue, a new paragraph is created every time a new person speaks. Jeremy No, asked, Did you make the team? I admitted.
Me either, Jeremy said. I dont care, I lied. Me neither, Jeremy lied. Dialogue tags 48 Retire: said, asked Brainstorm a list of more specific and interesting dialogue tags STYLE Mini-lesson Style
50 Your writing should show variety in language and sentence length. Your voice and tone should be appropriate for the audience. Questions to ask yourself: Did I use precise and descriptive language? Did I use variety in my word choice and sentence length? Is my expression clear and concise? Avoid short, choppy sentences! 51
Use adjectives, adverbs, and prepositional phrases to develop your simple sentences: Example: The child cried. At the edge of the playground, the lonely child cried softly into her teddy bear. You try it: The man laughed. Avoid short, choppy sentences! 52 Combine details. The dog barked. The mailman was frightened. He dropped the mail on the porch. He ran for
his life. When the dog barked, the frightened mailman dropped the mail on the porch and ran for his life. Are there shorty, choppy sentences in your story that you could combine? Use powerful and precise language! 53 The man walked into the room and starting talking. The teacher hurried into the classroom and started lecturing. The police officer burst into the suspects home and started interrogating. The demon clown crept into the bedroom and started
whispering. You try it: My sister ate her dinner and left the table. Be clear and concise! 54 Avoid run-ons. Fix it! I dont want to do homework do you I didnt think so. Be clear and concise! 55
Dont overuse pronouns. Which pronouns would you replace? What nouns can replace these pronouns? He ran into the street to grab the ball and it almost hit him. Luckily, his dad was watching, so he snatched him just before it struck. SAMPLE STORY Paragraph 1: Introduction 57
Be careful what you wish for because you just might get it. I learned this the hard way last year when a stranger came into my life and offered to make my dreams come true. Now that I am living my dream, it seems much more like a nightmare. All I wanted was to get some attention. Well I got it alright. Paragraph 2: Character Description/Background 58 It all happened last year. I was in seventh grade at Springdale Middle
School and not exactly making a name for myself. With my dull looks and even duller personality, hardly anyone even knew who I was. I walked the halls like an invisible ghost. Even the teachers forgot my name half the time. Youre Jamie, right? I daydreamed every day about what it would be like to be noticed, Paragraph 3: Catalyst Event Before the Wish 59 So it was just another typical day for me at Springdale Middle School when my fantasy
became a reality. As usual, I was sitting alone at my lunch table, my face buried in a book. At least I was a good student. I looked up to see Mr. Smith, the drama teacher, at the microphone. He was announcing that the school play tryouts would take place that day after school. Not that I would ever have had the guts to try out. I couldnt even work up the courage to talk to the person next to me in class. I went back to reading. Paragraph 4: The Genie Appears/ Wish is Made 60
Sounds like fun, doesnt it? I looked up from my book and noticed this kid had sat down across from me. I had never seen him before. Was he on another other team? Was he new? All I could tell was that he was cute. He had blond hair falling over his sky blue eyes. He smiled at me, flashing these ultra white teeth. No one ever did this, smile at me, so I didnt even know how to react. He repeated his question. Dialogue 61
Doesnt it sound like fun? The play, I mean. If you have the guts to try out, I guess. And you dont? he asked. No way! I exclaimed. They wouldnt want me. What makes you say that? Cause no one ever does. Okay, I just met this kid and I was already acting like such a loser. Too bad. My name is Sean, by the way. Are you new? You could say that. Anyway, its nice to meet you. Dialogue continued 62
So, you really dont think that anyone wants you? Cant you tell? Do you see anyone at my lunch table? I guess not, he admitted. So tell me. If you could have anythinganything in the world-thats what youd want? To be wanted? Doesnt everyone want to be wanted? I suppose. Anyway, he said, standing up. I have to go. I think Im supposed to get a tour or something. It was nice meeting you. Really. Before this new kid, Sean, turned to leave, he handed Paragraph 5: After the Wish
63 The bell rang soon after Sean left the cafeteria. I got up to put my tray away and moved on to my locker. The strangest thing happened at my locker. A group of girlspopular girls who barely knew my namecame up to me and started chatting with me. It was like we were friends. Then in math class, my homework buddy asked me if I had a boyfriend. He even asked for my cell number. And Mr. Smith, the math teacher, suddenly knew my name. Jamie, would you please collect the homework for me? he asked. Maybe that new kid, Sean, had some magic going for him after all.
Paragraph 6: Trouble Sets In 64 As I walked from class to class that afternoon, I was surprised by all the attention I was suddenly getting. It came from everywhere both the kids and teachers. Even the principal pulled me out of homeroom to talk to me. But after school, things took an ugly turn. As I walked home, I noticed that there were these FBI posters plastered all over the place. They were on trees, mailboxes, and telephone poles. Curious, I stopped to look at one posted on a tree. And there I was; there was a picture of me
under the big bold letters: WANTED. Paragraph 7: Conflict Escalates 65 The poster said that I was wanted for armed robbery and there was a reward offered to anyone who had information on my whereabouts. I ripped the poster off of the tree and ran home. When I got inside my door, I ran to the television and turned on the news. There was an emergency bulletin announcing the search was on for WANTED armed robber, Jamie Simmons. That was me. The FBI wanted me!
Paragraph 8: Climax 66 I thought back to the strange kid at the lunch table. Maybe he was a genie after all. It was obvious that he wasnt very good at his job though. Who would wish to be WANTED by the FBI? Before I could think any more about this, I heard a bang on the door. FBI! someone shouted. I was terrified, but I had no choice but to answer. They were threatening to break down the front door. As I opened the door, an officer burst into my house and told me to get down on the floor. He knelt down and put handcuffs on me. He didnt seem to care that I was crying like a
baby, scared out of my mind. Jamie Simmons? You are wanted by the FBI! he announced. Paragraph 9: Falling Action 67 I was arrested that day and put in a juvenile detention center. My mom got me a lawyer, and I am hoping that the truth will come out at my trial next month. I told the lawyer to search for Sean, the genie who ruined my life. I dont think he believes me about this though. He looks at me like Im crazy. And so does my mom.
Paragraph 10: Resolution 68 Ive been in juvie for almost a year now, and Ive had a lot of time to think. If I could go back to being the girl who sits alone at lunch, unnoticed, I would. That girl was just fine. She just needed to take a chance, put herself out there a little more. But I cant go back to being that girl. Sean made sure of that. All I can say is be careful what you wish for because you just might get it. Revision Checklist
69 Is the point of view consistent?
Five sentences with good details? Character description focused? Are the tenses past and past perfect (did, was, should have)? Good transitions to show change of place and time? Are events logically connected and in order? Descriptive? Is there imagery to help the reader visualize? Are sentences varied in language and length? REVISION Mini-lesson 71
Focus: first reading Point of view Character description: Is it focused? 72 Is the point of view consistent? I always wanted to learn how to surf.
Finally, I got my chance last summer when my family and I want to California. I took a surf lesson in San Diego. When the lesson began, he was a little scared. The teacher was nice enough, but the ocean looked rough, and he couldnt imagine surfing in it. Little did I know that by the end of the day, I would be a surfing king! 73 Character description focused? Mrs. Olsen has four children, two dogs, and three cats. She has blond hair, green eyes,
and is tall for a woman. Her husband travels for work quite a bit, so poor Mrs. Olsen spends most days trying to juggle everyone and everything. She likes to play to tennis when time allows. Some days, she just wants to drop everything and run away. Mrs. Olsen loves her family, but there are times when she feels completely overwhelmed by them all. 74 Organization: second reading
Spatial and sequential transitions Details in logical order Tense consistency Good transitions? Logical order? 75 Water was everywhere. Our gym teacher entered the locker room in a panic. Joey ran to get Mr. Winters. He was not happy to see a flood coming from the showers. Everyone and everything was soaked. When I opened my ham and cheese sandwich, even it was soggy. I got a hamburger instead. Mom wasnt thrilled that I bought
lunch. Water was everywhere. Joey ran to get Mr. Winters. Our gym teacher entered the locker room in a panic. He was not happy to see a flood coming from the showers. Everyone and everything was soaked. Later on in the cafeteria, I opened my ham and cheese sandwich to discover that even it was soggy. I went to the lunch counter and got a hamburger instead. After school, Mom wasnt thrilled that I bought lunch. Are the tenses consistent? 76 The lioness crept closer to the herd, hiding in the tall grass. She tried to stay
downwind so the zebra wouldnt catch her scent and run, but the wind suddenly shifted and the herd was off. The lioness springs into action, racing after a small colt that lags behind her mother. The mighty predator comes within inches of her young prey when suddenly she slipped in the wet grass. That was all it took for the lucky colt to dart away to safety. 77 Content: third reading
Five to to six well-developed sentences in each paragraph One dynamic character who changes in some way Dialogue: at least two lines of dialogue Plot includes conflict, climax, and resolution Five sentences with good details? 78 My room is super messy. There are thumb tacks all over. There are clothes all over the floor. Trash is
everywhere. It is hard to walk in my room. My room is super messy. The floor is littered with thumb tacks, so you have to watch where you walk. My mom always yells at me about the piles of dirty clothes all over the floor. Since I like to draw and have no trash can, there are scraps of paper tossed everywhere. Its hard to walk into the minefield that is my bedroom without tripping over something. Dynamic character 79 Matt used to think that war was a game and the players were having fun. He thought that nothing would be more
exciting than to experience a real life battle. But he had been so nave. His ideas about war had been drawn from the experiences of playing video games on Saturday afternoons with a bag of Cheetos by his side. Now Matt understood what war really meant: it was pain, it was loss, it was tragedy. And he wanted nothing more to do with it. But this realization came at a huge price. With his brother fallen in battle and his mother stricken with grief, his heart was filled with regret. If he could go back in time and relive his moment with the genie, he would make a very different wish. But there was no going back. Matt had grown up enough to know this. Style: fourth reading
80 Descriptive writing including the use of imagery Appropriate and varied word choice Variety of simple, compound, and complex sentences Clear and concise expression
Is the writing descriptive? 81 I love my beach house. Its right on the beach, so the view is really good. Plus, I have my own room and it is pretty big. I love to stare out of the living room window at the sun, the blue ocean, and the gulls flying overhead. I love my beach house. Its in a prime location right on the beach, just ten feet from the foamy surf. Looking out the living room window, I have an amazing view of the rolling waves and the gull-filled sky overhead. Plus, I have a huge bedroom to myself with vaulted ceiling, a queen-sized bed, and enough space that even I cant clutter it all up.
Look for imagery in describing characters, setting, and events 82
I used to an open book but now I am like a jail, all of my thoughts and feelings locked away. Grief beat against the walls of my heart like a trapped bird until I burst into loud hot tears. A mole sat on my teachers face like a swollen tic, and I was actually frightened that it would leap off of her and attack me. The opposing team was like a mad herd of two ton elephants coming at me; the ground shook as they all stampeded toward the guy with the ball, me. Walking down the seventh grade hallway is like sticking your hand into a wasps nest and who would be crazy enough to do that? Are sentences varied in language and
length? 83 I love to fishing with my uncle. I went fishing with my Uncle Bill last weekend. He has a boat at the shore. I love being on his boat. I always catch something. I caught two fish this trip. I cleaned them. Then I cooked them right on the boat. I have always loved fishing. I love fishing with my uncle. Last weekend, my Uncle Bill and I went down to Ocean City and we took his boat out for the day. His cabin cruiser has always been a lucky ride for me, so I knew I would catch something. This time, I caught two healthy-sized bass. Before we even docked, my uncle and I cleaned and cooked the fish. I can still smell the salty air and taste the sweet, tender meat of bass right off the
hook. Ever since my first time with Uncle Bill three years back, I have loved our fishing trips. 84 Conventions: Fifth reading Complete sentences Appropriate punctuation Correct spelling
Appropriate capitalization Double-spaced Use proofreading marks: 85 The dream of being on honor roll. Was it even still possible. I had worked so hard at the beginning of the Marking Period now I was hardly working at all. Do you even try? mom asks all the time. What can I say. I dont try I have forgotten how. In september I had all As and Bs. Now Rules
86 Take your peers draft and move back to your own
seat. Check off items on the checklist as you review your peers story. Make some notes neatly on their draft for revision; use proofreading marks for editing. Record push and a pull. Wait patiently for others to finish the process. When I give the signal, meet with your peer to discuss suggestions. Be prepared to discuss suggestions you offered and were given.